What went well for my first draft:
- Use of image from the film
- Inclusion of a synopsis and verdict
What hasn't gone well for my first draft:
- Your review is very unorganised - it is difficult to see where the film details and synopsis are placed. This needs to be made much clearer with the use of columns to separate text - perhaps the use of subheadings may also help.
- Your critical voice is not established very well; you need to make it clear whether you like or dislike the film throughout the synopsis and your verdict.
- Your verdict is very short and does not give your readers a sense of whether the film should be viewed or not, the recommendation or lack of, needs to be much more explicit.
- Although your review is formal in places, it lacks sensationalised language. You need to include many more language devices within your writing to make this review entertaining and convincing to read.
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ReplyDelete- Use of image from the film
- Inclusion of a synopsis and verdict
EBI:
- Your review is very unorganised - it is difficult to see where the film details and synopsis are placed. This needs to be made much clearer with the use of columns to separate text - perhaps the use of subheadings may also help
- Your critical voice is not established very well; you need to make it clear whether you like or dislike the film throughout the synopsis and your verdict
- Your verdict is very short and does not give your readers a sense of whether the film should be viewed or not, the recommendation or lack of, needs to be much more explicit
- Although your review is formal in places, it lacks sensationalised language. You need to include many more language devices within your writing to make this review entertaining and convincing to read.
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