Whats been changed from the feedback of the first draft?
- The first draft was unorganised, the film details and synopsis were difficult to see. The columns weren't made clear therefore, the text wasn't as separated as it shouldve been. Due to this feedback, i made sure my columns were more clear and so that it was made visible where the text is separated.
- My critical voice wasn't established well. From this feedback I changed my review to a negative review rather than a positive review. This was made clear due to the addition of the Daily Mail quote on the side of my review.
Vijender Dubb is the producer of numerous... no 'a' needed.
ReplyDeleteThe next sentence also needs the 'a' removing - 'involves unique...'
'Neeraj Kainth and his friends...' needs to be a new paragraph.
'discussing' needs two s
Can you include a comment on how the actors play the characters? Do they present them well?
The quote from the Daily Mail is an nice touch but just make sure you separate the Daily and Mail!
Be careful, you are still giving away the ending of the film by commenting on the deaths. Can you not just remain vague about the fact they die?